Friday, 23 May 2014

the penance


       the penance


Once there was a snake with four legs and he thought he was the king of the jungle. All of the smaller animals bow down to him.They find food for snake. One day mouse couldn't find any food  "oh mighty snake i can't find any food, please spare me" mumbled mouse. "That is ridiculous i am a hungry snake, maybe I could eat you" "NO"  "not me" mouse cried softly "I will" and with that snake ate mouse. meanwhile on the other side of the jungle.........

"WHAT" shrieked wizard "it is true master the balance tipped just as snake ate mouse" exclaimed monkey "we shall talk to that stupid snake"

Snake then saw wizard " why are you here pathetic human" questioned snake
"i am here to take away what you love, your legs" "no not my legs" screamed snake "yes i will" and with that sparks shot out of wizards palms, snake scampered away never to be seen again. But snake lost two things his legs and his mercy so if you ever end up seeing a wild snake look into its eyes it will never show mercy........... 

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  1. Miss TaylorFriday, May 23, 2014 12:00:00 pm

    Interesting ideas Shaarav. I wouldn't like to meet a snake like that, he doesn't sound very nice. I love the interesting vocabulary especially how you've used all these different words for 'said'.

    I have a lot of questions though, what is going on in the middle paragraph? Some of the sentences you have written there don't make sense? Why is the monkey there? And why doesn't the wizard like the snake? Why did he take away his legs?

    I think it would be a good idea if you reread this to yourself and fixed some of those things so it is clear to the reader.

    Thanks!

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  2. MUNROFriday, May 23, 2014 2:57:00 pm

    COOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL

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  3. UnknownSaturday, May 24, 2014 10:32:00 am

    Thanks for sharing Shaarav! The picture you chose really suits your story :)

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  4. Jonathan AndersonMonday, May 26, 2014 12:04:00 pm

    I don't call it what you think I call it. you confuse me.

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  5. will and seanMonday, May 26, 2014 12:07:00 pm

    coooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool

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  6. KNS Room 15Tuesday, May 27, 2014 11:58:00 am

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  7. SeanThursday, June 12, 2014 6:54:00 pm

    Wow Sharrav I like the Wizard he's a very good character

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